So for English, I had to rephrase sentences so that I would show them what it is and not tell them. This basically means to not tell them about something but to show them. E.g 'The girl was sad' to 'Her head was low and we had seen tears roll down her face.' So now we understand what 'Show not tell' is here is my work:
The buildings were tall - The giant facilities gazed over me
Sarah was really upset - Tears ran down Sarah's eyes and her facial expressions turned blue
She was so happy to see her - A rush of excitement ran through her body when he walked through the door
The lake was beautiful - The lake's water moved swiftly with the sun which created a spectacular view
In conclusion, I found out that showing not telling is a good way to improve your writing. It was also hard at the same time. Thank you for reading my writing please comment on what you think about it.
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